Comments on: Available Darkness: Chapter 13

By: janice

janice — Sun, 19 Jul 2009 09:08:12 +0000

Any way you guys could bump it up to twice a week?! This was, as always, brilliant! I wouldn't have mentioned these if you hadn't asked, but a couple of typos/iffies stood out as I was reading. But I'm not telling you where they are till you promise to put that rock down...(good life coaches try not to assume, so I've no way of knowing if I'm the kind you told folk to toss rocks at over at Blogger Dad...:( ) when he felt his blanket brushed against something (maybe brush or brushing?) a woman leaning into the back ^ her car, She was young, with long blond hair, full of energy, which he could feel flaring from her every pore. (visions of long blonde energetic hair flaring from her pores;)) screamed, “move!” (Capital M? I'm not great at punctuation, but I think it might need one.) authorities, “get off him.” (Same here.) janice’s last blog post..Holidaying at Home: The East Neuk of Fife

By: Marc

Marc — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 22:57:04 +0000

Another masterpiece. You guys have the habit of ripping open my skull and painting the scene directly into my brain.

Beautiful, in a morbid kind of way

By: David Wright

David Wright — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 22:24:48 +0000

Marylin – Thanks!

Kool Aid – Thank you and I can’t wait, either.

Sean – Thank you for bringing a rough chapter to life!

write a writing – Thank you. We have plans to get it published, yes. Crossing our fingers!

Trina – Thank you. I’m glad you couldn’t wait! That’s the best compliment we can get. As for dark endings, I never give away what’s next. However, with a name like Available Darkness, you can imagine things will get… well, darker.

By: Trina

Trina — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 20:30:02 +0000

Savagely fierce, and delicious! I was trying to make myself wait till tonight, a delayed gratification kind of thing, but, since I suck at that, I gave in this aft. So, so glad I did.
Can’t wait to share this with my gal, she is going to absolutley love this. I do hope there’s a dark ending, sick of me I know – but had to put that out there.

By: write a writing

write a writing — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 16:42:17 +0000

You write good. have you tried getting it published? write a writing’s last blog post..How and Why to Write a Book

By: Sean

Sean — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 13:34:44 +0000

Dude, this chapter reads awesome. I just gotta hand you a high five in the comments. It was as fun to read it this morning as it was to play with it this week. HIGH 5! Sean’s last blog post..These Are Our Balloons

By: Kool Aid

Kool Aid — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 11:39:09 +0000

Death whizzed by his ears and smashed into another car window. Love it!! I am so totally wrapped in this story, the six days in between seem to drag on, like the time from sunset to twilight. Can't wait for next week. Kool Aid’s last blog post..Potty Training Power

By: Marylin

Marylin — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 08:51:30 +0000

Phew, that was intense... I like it! Marylin’s last blog post..My beautiful baby boy

By: David Wright

David Wright — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 08:03:53 +0000

Note: Spent a lot of time getting this one just right which meant some last minute editing. I hope there are no errors in the story. If you find any, feel free to comment - I won't take offense. Look forward to seeing your comments. David Wright’s last blog post..Available Darkness: Chapter 13