Comments on: Available Darkness: Chapter 16

By: Available Darkness: Chapter 14

Available Darkness: Chapter 14 — Sun, 23 Aug 2009 00:12:09 +0000

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By: Sean

Sean — Fri, 07 Aug 2009 19:54:57 +0000

I’m too close to actually have an opinion, but I’m sure it reads with a different level of pianoforte when inhaled. : > )

By: Trina

Trina — Fri, 07 Aug 2009 18:32:26 +0000

Thanks for the connection. Ya, I know, the point of it all will become clear in another chapter I suppose thats the point of all this week in week out….argh! But ‘argh!’ in a good way.

By: WRITE A WRITING

WRITE A WRITING — Fri, 07 Aug 2009 15:25:35 +0000

Really nice….n hey there is a type there “by a inky darkness”

By: David Wright

David Wright — Fri, 07 Aug 2009 13:03:15 +0000

Trina – Jacob erased her mind of the encounter. Will be explained in a later chapter. I hinted at it with her dizzy head, etc…

By: Trina

Trina — Fri, 07 Aug 2009 12:38:43 +0000

Great snag at the end, brother as in brotherhood or genetic connection? hmmmm…
Perhaps I missed a beat, but something that didnt work well for me was Abigail not remembering her most recent hideous encounter. Certainly she has exprerienced so much torment in such a short span, but why this one specific encounter is not forfront in her mind is troublesome to me.

By: janice

janice — Fri, 07 Aug 2009 12:02:25 +0000

I know, you big softie you! With you and Sean writing it, how could it not have!

I think it must have read well as one long piece, going by Jennifer’s comment above!

By: David Wright

David Wright — Fri, 07 Aug 2009 11:45:40 +0000

Thanks. The pacing is definitely one of our areas of concern as we are laying all this out over the course of months in once-a-week installments. We will read it through during the editing stage to see if it plays as well or better when read all at once. I don’t want to give anything away, but you should be pleased with the next few chapters as we get a bit more into the characters. While there are thrills, this book has an emotional heart.

By: David Wright

David Wright — Fri, 07 Aug 2009 11:41:38 +0000

Jennifer – Thank you. We are looking to get it complete by this fall, if not sooner. We are working with a great young photographer for the book cover – which is absolutely captivating.

By: janice

janice — Fri, 07 Aug 2009 11:28:42 +0000

I’m flagging a wee bit; too much running, tension and chasing. I liked the exchange about the dog; I needed that change in pace.

The “brother” bit came just in time to hook me for next week. Sorry if this sounds negative; it was still great writing. I thought you’d appreciate feedback on the pacing seeing as it’s been months now. Maybe it’s because I tend to read books in chunks that suit me, not a wee bit regularly. Same with DVD’s; we have 24 fests. I couldn’t have watched it every week.