Rosa – Sorry, I mistyped your name as Rose before. And I’m glad you’re not bored.

Rosa’s last blog post..Comunicándome – Communicating

Hope no one hammers you for sharing it.

Can’t wait to read the next go round. Reading each new chapter is always one of the highlights of my Fridays!

Mary Anne Fisher’s last blog post..How Doing, Being and Having More Could Be Screwing Up Your Life

Books can take time to build characters and have transition scenes between scenes. We don’t have quite the same luxury without risking a chapter which bores the audience. Each chapter must deliver something new or that advances the story. So, in this case, we needed to develop the character of John a bit – give him some time with his thoughts and give you a chance to see the internal dialogue running through his head.

So in order to deliver everything we needed to deliver, we simply went with a longer chapter. Thanks to everybody who has commented and is taking the journey with us. This WILL be a novel, there is no doubt in my mind and it’s awesome that we can all share this intimate space. It’s an honor that you care enough to comment and keep reading.

Marc – Thanks!

janice – thank you.

Rose – Abigail didn’t quite touch him. She came close enough to deliver the thoughts to him, but they did not touch. I’m thrilled that you’re so excited! You should see my office. I have a stack of notes, charts, character profiles and even some sketches all pertaining to Available Darkness. This is not going to be your typical vampire or horror story by any stretch of the imagination.

DoyouDaveRamsey – Thanks! We’re enjoying the process, also.

Lori and Randi – I addressed your comments in the top portion.

Mary Anne – Not sure if I should mention it, or leave it hanging, but Abigail’s ability came from her brief encounter with John.

Michael – Thanks for the nice words. Dialogue has always been one of the things which has fallen short in bad online fiction. We aim for the truest voices of the characters and hope never to fall into the cliched. I’m glad it read well as simply dialogue. Sean has been twisting my arm to also develop a script at the same time as we write the book.

Trina – Thank you, you hit on a good word for this, the story and this platform, connectivity. It’s a theme I’ve given an incredible amount of thought to.

Nice job with all of the dialog. I noticed that you dedicated almost half of this chapter to it. (For grins I deleted everything but the dialog to see how well it moves along. Most of it read like a script!)

Michael

Michael’s last blog post..Picture This: Day 13. Another Death in Detroit.

And what accounts for Abigail’s psychic abilities? Is this a gift she was born with, or…

My mind is gleefully racing.

You guys are awesome and getting better by the week.

Mary Anne Fisher’s last blog post..How Doing, Being and Having More Could Be Screwing Up Your Life

Lori gave me a new insight into serial writing when she mentioned “the lull.” She’s right–normally in a book, there is that lull, where scenes are set or characters are built. Not much going on, action-wise, but all necessary to the book. With serial writing, you don’t have the luxury. Each chapter must insert a new twist or revelation to keep the reader hanging for a whole week, not just hanging for a page or two. Definitely much more of a challenge. Great job, guys.

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Dave

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