Comments on: Serial and Milk: Available Darkness – Chapter Ten

By: Paisley (Turning Thoughts Into Words)

Paisley (Turning Thoughts Into Words) — Sat, 04 Jul 2009 08:23:03 +0000

I sense how hard it is for you to write about Abigail. She's a child having to survive by doing adult things. Don't know if anyone else is feeling this child/adult vibe. She's a unique character. Paisley (Turning Thoughts Into Words)’s last blog post..Freedom Glory Project

By: Lori Hoeck

Lori Hoeck — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 17:14:50 +0000

"She exhaled with bottomless breath she hadn’t even known she was holding." She wasn't the only one holding her breath! Lori Hoeck’s last blog post..Intuition — first self defense weapon of choice

By: janice

janice — Sat, 27 Jun 2009 21:00:09 +0000

I missed reading this yesterday morning; I'm experimenting with different blogging rythms and tried leaving it to read at the weekend. I still loved it, but Friday morning didn't feel the same without it, like I'd watched a favourite show on video instead of at its normal time. As always, I enjoyed the tension, but my favourite phrase was the "smeared tangerine sunset". janice’s last blog post..Take Time to Treasure What’s Important

By: Sean

Sean — Sat, 27 Jun 2009 14:16:30 +0000

All props go to Dave for that one. He laid out the bones to begin with and I added almost nothing to the edit. Then he added more after the pass back. I was there with Abigail as well. Sean’s last blog post..6 Rules For Remarkable Marital Communication

By: Blogger Dad/David Wright

Blogger Dad/David Wright — Fri, 26 Jun 2009 23:41:35 +0000

Marc – Yeah, it’s flying by. I REALLY wanted to keep going to the next chapter, where starts one of my favorite scenes in the book. But I resisted the urge. Glad you liked it.

Rosa – Thanks, glad you’re enjoying it and her character.

Trina – Thank you. And yeah, we love to leave you hanging. We’re bad like that.

Michael – Thanks! Fittingly enough, you picked on the one scene which Sean and I re-wrote the most this week. While we are writing a book full of action, I find action one of the harder things to nail just right. I need a bit more time away from it to know if I really like it, but my initial sense is that it works. Thanks!

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By: Michael

Michael — Fri, 26 Jun 2009 22:53:50 +0000

"Abigail looked up just in time to see a red truck barreling towards her in the same lane. She was helpless, spinning the wheel faster until the car corrected, then over corrected and bounced up on the sidewalk and then back to the road again with a thud. A horn blasted as the truck jerked left and into the far lane missing her by barely the breath that was trapped inside her throat." I like this paragraph. It's very descriptive, and I felt like I was in the front seat beside Abigail. You made it look effortless, but I'm sure you put a lot of thought into it. Love the cliffhanger! Michael Michael’s last blog post..Picture This: Day 29. McMahon, Fawcett, and now Jackson

By: Trina

Trina — Fri, 26 Jun 2009 18:38:39 +0000

oh sure leave us hanging, right that’s the idea… terrific weaving of Abigails plight and charachter.

By: Rosa

Rosa — Fri, 26 Jun 2009 14:40:39 +0000

Wow, I’m loving Abigal more and more, she’s so brave and courageous. It broke my heart when she was about to start the car:
“She inserted the key into the ignition, whispered a silent prayer to a God she knew had long ago stopped listening (if he had ever lent her an ear at all)”
Great read, as usual

Rosa’s last blog post..La gente que me gusta – The people I like

By: Marc

Marc — Fri, 26 Jun 2009 08:52:47 +0000

Wow, chapter X already! I really enjoyed this chapter. Even though it's lighter in tone, it's also a nice look at Abigail's character and of course the cliffhanger ending is still there. Well done guys. Marc’s last blog post..How to Conduct Keyword Research and Pick the Right Words for Your Site