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Koolaid – Thanks, glad we can provide an escape from your vacation. LOL.

Marc – Thanks! I LOVE that photo, also. I spent nearly three hours searching for the perfect photo and was about to give up when I found that one. While the background is not quite of the book, it definitely captures the mood perfectly.

Rosa – Sorry, we need to recharge the engine for next week’s adventure.

Michael – Thank you. There are many layers that this story will unfold, lots of things for people to look into for meaning and pondering. You’re right on the line, and I will reconsider it with fresh eyes tonight and possibly edit it then.

As for the closing line, I was looking for a way to work it in at some point which would make readers smile rather than groan. I think this was just subtle enough to work. Thanks for confirming my hopes.

Trina – Glad you’re wanting more! Sean and I are talking about shooting for 1,000 words a day, but will likely stick to the 1,200 words or so on a weekly basis. It seems a bit more special in that it is only once a week, and on a Friday, no less. We look forward to the comments as much as it seems you look forward to the next story.

Paisley – Thank you. I worried a bit at calling this a vampire story in some of my mentions of the story elsewhere. I think there is enough genre-twisting material here to appeal to both vampire fans and people who could care less about vampires. We are definitely enjoying the process of building a mystery.

“His heart ached at her concern. He couldn’t believe that someone so broken could find the capacity to care for another soul.”

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…to provide a longer escape.

I am intrigued by ‘who saved who’, and suppose I can wait till next week for my next escape.

Having both characters perceive each other as “angels” was very creative.

“Of the girl, alone, walking along a surreal landscape of impossibility. .. a darkness eating at the very fabric of the world.”

By the time I got to this part I was so entrenched in the story that it was easy to visualize her in that scene. Great description! The only thing that tripped me here was the rhythm of “swirling chaos of fast moving black storm clouds…” The word “black” stopped me. Would this work: “A red sky was blackened by a swirling chaos of fast moving storm clouds…”? Or does that mess up the metaphor?

“The few moments of available darkness were rapidly receding to the morning light.”

Yes! I like how you seamlessly sneaked the title into the story.

Dang, now we have to wait another whole week!

Michael

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The amnesiac’s head started to split along that seam that separates the impossible from the inevitable.

and

The few moments of available darkness were rapidly receding to the morning light.

and what a brilliant photo to go with it!

I want book, graphic novel, movie, TV series and your autographs please

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